Stressed and pain,

 Feeling like vain,

Counting the drops of rain,

To forget the rampage of the hurricane

Forget the pride and enjoy the ride

Don't ever think twice

For sure you will survive

In this journey of life

Don't be a weed,

It will separate you from being dead

In this struggle who merely has no end

Inside this universe that full of threads

Work as one not one-by-one

For the problems to overcome

Just don't mee with the numb one,

To avoid sweat to come

	1. 25-01-2008 10:33
	opinion composition is ok. please just recheck and reread your grammar and composition. i would suggest you deepen the details because it was too broad. but anyways, not bad. keep posting. Registered Report

Animegirl

	2. 25-01-2008 18:09
	... ow..it's my first time to make a poem such as this one...so don't expect too much...maybe next time i'll make much better than this previous one...  yes it's too broad alright for civilians(like you) but for cadets/midshipmen of an academy, they understand it 100%... Registered Report

stgyro

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